Talk:Reality Check

Plot Twist ideas
I have an idea of a plot twist where one of the survivors is Dark Lorgas in disguise,and Phazon troopers were following them! -Untodarkness2

My idea is that Derek and his puffle somehow survive and find other survivors. They build a colony and try to live. But because their colony is based in a location many other want, they have to fight off other survivors that want to destroy them. They have to battle off aliens and evil penguins. -Feey1

Do you have any concrete idea for the plot? Because it seems like you're just winging it. You'll never finish the story like that.

Find a way to resolve the conflict in the story. Otherwise it'll drag on forever and ever until you end up boring your readers to death.

Also, you're not using servers correctly. There are no "server portals", and there is not one "Residence Server". There are four classes of servers; each class has a different map of CP. Each server is a duplicate of CP, with different penguins on it.  Yours Truly,   Explorer 767 ( GET READY DREAMLAND  )   v   •  [ e ]  01:23, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

There is one called RCP. And I do admit I am sort of winging the story. But the plan is that 4 penguins and 1 puffle survive and must build a colony. They have to defend against aliens, evil penguins, and more. This whole time they must reproduce and save the penguin race. Plus other people will edit it anyway, so you have to sort of go with it. -Feey1

I agree.Dark Lorgas can be considered the antagonist,as he staged the plane ASPLOSION and the Server Incident. -Untodarkness2

RCP is a layout/map, not a server. The problem with your plot is that there doesn't seem to be a way for the story to end properly. What goal should the protagonists fulfill?  Yours Truly,   Explorer 767 ( GET READY DREAMLAND  )   v   •  [ e ]  02:01, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

Well read the latest part(Day ????). It shows that they have ended up in a reality error that occurred when the dimensions crashed into one. They have to try and find their way out of it, and back into the real world. All in all they have to survive against evil penguins, more reality errors, and alien survivors(who are some what very dumb and stupid looking). -Feey1

Feey,Agent Lorgus(Who you call Donald) is Lorgas in disguise,obviously.HIS NAME. I'm Different... SPAAAAAAAAAAAAACEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!! 02:36, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

I think you could do this differently and a lot better. First off, focus on the main characters' lives before the server crash (remember, they probably don't know each other). Second, foreshadow the crash with newspaper headlines or something. Third, have them all arrive in CP just before the crash. Maybe you could have some scenes where the server operators notice the computers crashing or something. Once the crash happens, the rest of the story is up to you.

And please read the Server article again. You're still doing it wrong.  Yours Truly,   Explorer 767 ( GET READY DREAMLAND  )   v   •  [ e ]  12:12, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

Good idea. Progressive Stupidity Mata Nui,the great spirit,allows you to speak to him! 14:37, 3 September 2011 (UTC)